There's a certain elegance and beauty about the way you write which I really enjoy. Like Hikey and Neen, you also have a unique style which makes a refreshing change from some stuff I've read on her.
A couple of minor suggestions from the last piece, however:
Quote:-A true heart I feel,
blushing at the stars,
I would try to avoid the passive voice of the first line. For me the passive voice is less powerful than the active voice. For example,
"With a pick-axe, he killed her." will never hold the same weight as,
"He killed her with a pick-axe.".
At the moment, a true heart is being felt like you. You are the subject of the sentence, put yourself in charge. You want to feel that true heart.
Also, the definate article in the second line seems a bit redundant to me. Plus it would scan better too as;
"I feel a true heart,
blushing at stars."Just a thought.
Quote:my fluttering timid hope,
reaching silent alone,
I drop the 'timid' premodifier from line three, pluralise hope and make reaching, reach. i.e
"My fluttering hopes,
reach silent alone."Again, it's just a thought.
Quote:Waxing moonlight dreams,
flicker in my soul
a faint sigh
fading to the sky
I really like this.
Quote:waiting through the night
a new dawn's fragile light.
Seems a bit cliched. Especially
'a new dawn'. Those things aside, I really enjoyed reading it.