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I'd have to agree with Doc; The Morning After is a fine, very terse piece of descriptive writing, I felt there was an underlay of wonderfully jaded bitterness to the description, but I was underwhelmed by The Kiss, mostly because I knew exactly what was going to happen half way though. The minute Alison says that her dad "never got over her", my mind immediately thought of what Sophie had said earlier, and the simple fact that in a short story, no dialogue or action shown is unlikely to be coincidental or irrelevant, led me to uncover the rest of the story before I'd even read it.

Don't get me wrong, it's not a terrible piece of writing, but since the plotting is rather transparent it doesn't hold the interest particularly well.

(A minor quibble: Alison notes that "She liked to refer to me as Alison". As opposed to what? It is her name, after all, and at this point it's fairly obvious that they are fairly well acquainted with one another, so it's unlikely she would refer to a more formal title. I'm sorry, it just stuck in my mind and annoyed me.)

Hahaha, you most definitely have, thanks a lot- tis very much appreciated!! I'm also glad you got the point of Winter Wonderland, some people thought the narrator was the rapist and it was just like 'nooooo, definitely NOT what I was after!'

Anyway, to show my appreciation have...

a bookshop of your very own with a fully stocked alcohol cabinet (pretend the brands on there are half decent) and some cookies. Yeah.

Thanks a lot Yeah, I was doing the qualifying thing then took them out hoping it would make it better, so glad it does!! Will go through and get some of those adjectives sorted as well.

I don't have a great deal of personal experience on the subject; our deputy head/ maths teacher from GCSE/ general amazing person was diagnosed with it/died as a result during sixth form, so it feels like a slightly personal topic even though it's not really. But yeah, I've been googling blogs and e-mailing MND foundation and stuff like that, so I'm hoping the time-frames and the thoughts are a little bit accurate...

I'll be getting more feedback on Friday so after I've done some more work on it I might send a PM or something if that's alright??

Thanks again

Thank you! This is the last time I'm asking, promise (well... until next year if I get a half decent mark in this anyway )