Un~eee verse

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hikey

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4th Oct 2002 at 11:46 am

its the semi automatic stun gun!!!!!!!!!!!! yeehaw

 
the worst words start with Un
like Unrequited,unloved, and unwanted.
in my Un eee verse
some bad words end
like those begun,
like shun and if you excuse
the pun even nice things end
with un.

in the un eee verse
the negative is king
its unnice, unkind, and unknown.
the un eee verse
is only made worse
by the universe itself
where positivity rules
where you are loved wanted and known.

hikey
he aint all there he dont like beans!!!!!!!!!!!

hikey

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4th Oct 2002 at 12:02 pm

its the semi automatic stun gun!!!!!!!!!!!! yeehaw

 
this is more of a work in progress it has the makings of something good but isnt there just yet
he aint all there he dont like beans!!!!!!!!!!!

Animal

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4th Oct 2002 at 12:10 pm

Animal -

 
i can see where this is going, it reminds of a poet i used to like when i was a kid but i forget his name

its kinda "telling it like it is to the kiddies" stuff to me

but i likes, keep working on it id like to see how it turns out

Edited by Animal Oct 2002
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hikey

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4th Oct 2002 at 12:41 pm

its the semi automatic stun gun!!!!!!!!!!!! yeehaw

 
cheers darren yea i like kiddie stuff im glad u didnt say ha thats sh*t |mumbles incoherently
he aint all there he dont like beans!!!!!!!!!!!

Will

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4th Oct 2002 at 5:01 pm

 
yeah its a good idea, but it's not quite there yet. but it could be fantastic with a bit of touching up.

Caged Liberty

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5th Oct 2002 at 1:03 am

Caged Liberty - Torrential high seas dragged me to my knees

Torrential high seas dragged me to my knees

 
I like also.
Good use of language.


 
 
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