The Hypnotist's Channel

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uponthetelegram

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24th Aug 2002 at 1:27 pm

 
2+2=5

Edited by uponthetelegram Oct 2002

uponthetelegram

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24th Aug 2002 at 2:43 pm

 
I welcome reviews, thoughts and ideas relating to this, the first of my 'proper' poems.

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26th Aug 2002 at 12:23 am

 
Quote: uponthetelegram_
I welcome reviews, thoughts and ideas relating to this, the first of my 'proper' poems.


I quite like this, but one thing, I can't figure out what "Channel 7" is referring to.
Triptoheaveandhoupdowntoandfroyouhaveno
wordtriptriptoadreamdragonhideyourwingsina
ghosttowersailscacklingateveryplatewebreak
krackedbyscatteredneedlesthelittleminute
goNg

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:17 pm

 
Channel 7 is the Hypnotist's Channel.

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:19 pm

 
The rythm is quite disjointed, with the second two lines rhyming which is very irregular. I suppose it adds to the poem's originality? (I'm trying to be a literature boffin here but it's not working )
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:27 pm

 
Yeah, I know. Hence the reason it's a poem and not a song (as it was going to be).

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:29 pm

 
If you could come up with some decent psychadelic music for it it would be ace. I'd try, but ( ) I've just sold my guitar and I'm not getting a new one till some time in september.

*cries once more*

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:55 pm

 
I decided against the guitar. And decided on a four track recorded. I went to by the four track recorder. Sold out. So I wasted all my money on a new deck (cos I'd pogoed my old one to death), clothes and videos and even CD's.

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:01 pm

 
Wow, i wasted some money on clothes recently coz of the new dress code at school.

I look like a f*cking school prefect!
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:11 pm

 
With your results, I'm suprised you're not a prefect!

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:11 pm

 
Anyhow, enough of that, I still welcome comments, review, etc, on this poem I wrote.

uponthetelegram

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30th Aug 2002 at 4:40 pm

 
One of the only decent poems Ive written... A good poem - but could still be improved.

clivey_baby

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8th Sept 2002 at 1:42 pm

 
i like
made me think, well ponder

uponthetelegram

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9th Oct 2002 at 2:32 pm

 
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