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1929

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23rd Aug 2002 at 12:09 am

 

There's no pride in being an amateur,
Hence, no sin in wanting to try -
Verse is generally a natural
Introspective,
A look inside oneself.

This bullsh*t "human nature"
That no-one can rely
on - because it doesn't exist except in
"The Human Directive" -
[available from yourself(c)].

Now - here's the truth of the human creature:
There is no "Human Condition" - why?
Because as far as verse is concerned, the natural
Way to write is to feel the phony self-loathing and be
Reflective,
You know what I mean - Another f*cking boring poem about yourself.

They don't even rhyme, simple amateur.
Ever heard of the word "STRUCTURE"?
No, didn't think so. You see,
There's no pride in being an amateur -
The sin lies in vanity.

Patrick M. Gough
2002


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Will

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23rd Aug 2002 at 10:54 am

 
not bad, not bad at all.

uponthetelegram

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23rd Aug 2002 at 2:46 pm

 
Ooh, that poem is so aimed at me!
Probably.


Upon the Telegram, the ex-Dr Robb, friend of the stars, artist.

uponthetelegram

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24th Aug 2002 at 1:52 pm

 
Caged_Liberty: Ah! Now I see! I like, very very very clever
uponthetelegram: But this one holds no book
uponthetelegram: Her freedom under lock and key (Caged)
uponthetelegram: Copex means nothing though
uponthetelegram: Yes, Scotland, Sept/Oct
uponthetelegram: let the locals talk
Caged_Liberty: No one's ever writteny thing about me before. I'm touched.

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24th Aug 2002 at 2:11 pm

 
[quote=1929_ link=1030061372/0#0 date=1030061372]
There's no pride in being an amateur,
Hence, no sin in wanting to try -
Verse is generally a natural
Introspective,
A look inside oneself.

This bullsh*t "human nature"
That no-one can rely
on - because it doesn't exist except in
"The Human Directive" -
[available from yourself(c)].

Now - here's the truth of the human creature:
There is no "Human Condition" - why?
Because as far as verse is concerned, the natural
Way to write is to feel the phony self-loathing and be
Reflective,
You know what I mean - Another f*cking boring poem about yourself.

They don't even rhyme, simple amateur.
Ever heard of the word "STRUCTURE"?
No, didn't think so. You see,
There's no pride in being an amateur -
The sin lies in vanity.

1929

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26th Aug 2002 at 12:02 am

 
Quote: uponthetelegram_




Not all of us want to write classic poetry in the blind hope that we'll be recognised.

We aren't all bloody stuck up our own arses on some art trip.

"It may be called avant garde, but (in the words of my old friend Alvin) 'Avant garde clue'! " - George Harrison

If you don't like my poetry, don't read it.



Erm...at what point did I say it was aimed at you?

The poem is aimed at the whole repetetive self-pity attitude that's coming through in people our age today (just look at 90% of the poems on this forum...), poetry should be either a joy to read, or at least interesting. Most of these are neither.

Self pity never peeled a potato.

And this "stuck up our own arses on some art trip"? Do you think that when Michaelangelo painted the ceiling of the Cystene chapel he was "stuck up his own a*se on an art trip"? Fair enough if he was, but it didn't do him any harm, did it?

Patrick

P.S. I don't dislike your poetry, but I only appreciate it on an entertainment level because I can sense the tongue-in-cheek-ness of it. And don't get p*ssed off at criticism.
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uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:24 pm

 
Quote: 1929_



Erm...at what point did I say it was aimed at you?

The poem is aimed at the whole repetetive self-pity attitude that's coming through in people our age today (just look at 90% of the poems on this forum...), poetry should be either a joy to read, or at least interesting. Most of these are neither.

Self pity never peeled a potato.


F*ck, you are sounding increasingly like Alyssa and I!
Join us Patrick... Join us!

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 1:26 pm

 
Yes, Patrick. Join us...
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

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1929

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:21 pm

 
Erm...no. I don't take sweeties from strangers.

Anagram of the day:

Evangelists - Evil's agents.
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Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:27 pm

 
Don't you even want to see some puppies?

Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:31 pm

 
Santa = Satan

1929

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:32 pm

 
Yeah, mister! Yeah, sure, oh boy oh boy oh boy! Do they wag their tails?Oh boy oh boy!
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uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:33 pm

 
1929 = Jerry 'The King' Lawler

1929

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:34 pm

 
Funeral - Real Fun
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28th Aug 2002 at 2:36 pm

 
One plus twelve = two plus eleven
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:37 pm

 
Quote: Jefferson_Tract_
Yeah, mister! Yeah, sure, oh boy oh boy oh boy! Do they wag their tails?Oh boy oh boy!


Theyre not that kind of puppies...They have got wet noses though.
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

uponthetelegram

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:37 pm

 
God - Dog

I suck at anagrams

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:38 pm

 
Geri Halliwell = Mongrel
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

Animal

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:40 pm

Animal -

 
Quote: DrFuturity_
One plus twelve = two plus eleven

ONE AND ONE IS ONE ELEVEN!

to quote reverand maynard
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The world isn't run by weapons anymore, or energy, or money. It's run by little rabbits and zeroes, little bits of data. It's all just electrons.

Cycling Antics

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:41 pm

 
Quote: girlpants_

ONE AND ONE IS ONE ELEVEN!

to quote reverand maynard


Just checking if you can quote a quote with a quote in it. (and seeing how many times i can put the word "quote" in a sentence)
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

Been training dogs

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28th Aug 2002 at 2:56 pm

 
You can't, and the maximum is 3.
Maybe in order to understand mankind, we have to look at the word itself: "Mankind". Basically, it's made up of two separate words - "mank" and "ind". What do these words mean ? It's a mystery, and that's why so is mankind.

http://www.cco.net/~jpete/deepthou.htm

1929

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28th Aug 2002 at 10:41 pm

 
MURDER = RED RUM RED RUM RED RUM
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LoonyPandora

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28th Aug 2002 at 11:17 pm

LoonyPandora - Daft Cow?

Daft Cow?

 
Quote:
You can't, and the maximum is 3.


your right, you can't quote a quote, but in development is a mod called "quote within quote", which will allow you to quote a quote, hence the name.

But you are wrong about how many times you can fit the word quote into a sentece, I just did 6


 
 
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